
nce upon a time, on the edge of a dark forest, lived a girl called Goldilocks.
You have probably heard of her?
If so, you will know three things:
She was small
She had lots of golden curls
And she looked like one of those very good children who never ever seem to get into trouble for anything.
Well the truth is, she did get into trouble, quite alot in fact- not because she was bad, but because her curiosity always got the best of her. Now a little curiosity can be a good thing, but too much can get you into t r o u b l e.
Well in Goldilocks case, she had a little more than too much.
Her mother often worried about letting Goldilocks out of her sight, but sometimes the little girl would ask one, two many questions and stick her fingers in one, two many pots of honey, and peek under the lids of one, two many saucepans. Her mother unable to bear it any longer, would send her out to collect firewood.
This was just such a morning and as Goldilocks slipped through the gate her mother called after her,
"Remember these three things, Do not stray from the path, be back in time for breakfast, and whatever you do, take care of your little red shoes, you know cousin Dorothy went through alot of trouble to send those for you Goldy"
"Oh I will mother", called Goldlilocks. And she ment it- well the part a bout her little red shoes anyway.
Off she went skipping, picking a flower here and a flower there.
Looking down a rabbit hole.."I wonder if cousin Alice, really fell into Wonderland..mmm maybe I will ask her next time mother and I visit the Institute", she said out loud to herself, she was very pleased at herself for sticking to the path, well at least for now, until she heard a voice so beautiful the birds started singing along, Goldilocks curiosity took over and off she went running deep into the woods following the beautiful voice she heard. "Mother always tells me the story abut the princess who was sent to the woods because of her beauty, and her voice was as soft as snow..what was her name?..Snow White!, it must be her, ohh" Goldilocks was so excited to meet the 7 dwarves she didn't notice how quiet the forest had got, and how she was deep into the woods. Slowing down her pace, she started to panic, "mother is going to be so cross, I'm late for breakfast, I dont know how I am going to get back home", she started sobbing. She stood all alone in the middle of the forest. All she could hear was the rustling of leaves and.well..buzzing. "I wonder who is making all that noise" she thought. And she followed the buzzing until she came into a clearing.
There, in the middle of the trees stood a curious looking wooden cottage and, next to it, three wooden beehives, surrounded by lots of buzzing bees.
"Maybe someone in that house could help me find my way back home," she thought and off she went to the curious looking cottage.
She knocked, one, two three times. No one answered.
I wonder where evryone is, as she turned to leave the door opened and the sweet smelling scent of honey and poridge crept from the gap left by the opened door and turned the knots in Goldilocks tummy. She remembered how hungry she was and how she had already missed breakfast.
Slowly she pushed the door and poked her little curly head in, "H E L L O?" she called out. No reply.
As she stepd inside she noticed that there was three of everthing, three wooden chairs, three comfortable looking beds and sitting on the table, three deliciously looking bowls filled with honey porridge. "Oh I am terribly famished" Goldilocks thought and ran straight to the dinner table.
Now we all know how Goldilocks ate Papa Bears, Mama Bears and Baby Bears porridge, but she ate ALL of Baby Bears because it was just right, "Oh no" she realised she had eaten all the porridge from one of the bowls and she felt bad, so she poured half of the first bowl (the too hot one) into the empty bowl. "There we go, good as new" she smiled to herself and off she went to sit down for a while.
"Now this chair looks too BIG for me" Goldilocks said about Papa Bears chair,
"This chair has too much wool on it" she said about Mama Bears chair,
"Oh! this chair looks just right for me", and she climbed onto Baby Bears chair . She didn't know how heavy she was and she accidently -F L O P went baby bears chair. Red faced she felt so bad she tried to fix it but alas, nothing could be done, so she placed the flowers she had picked earlier ontop of the cushion to baby bears chair, "I hope that makes it all better".
Soon she felt tired and her gaze went to the beds, "Maybe." she wondered, "maybe if I just lie down for a bit, get my energy back I can find my way home." and with this said, she drifted off to find the perfect bed to lie down on.
The first bed was too BIG she felt pea sized ontop of this gigantic bed,
The next bed was too clean and neat, and she was afraid to mess it up,
The last bed looked perfect, with her search over, she removed her little red shoes, placed them neatly by the side of the bed, and she drifted off to sleep.
Now as she was resting, the Bear family returned from their morning walk. "Something does not seem right darling" Papa Bear gruffed to Mama Bear. "Oh honey I'm sure its nothing you worry to much" replied Mama Bear. Baby Bear stayed quiet because all he saw was his little chair, broken to pieces with flowers on top of it.."Look mama, I think my chair died, see, someone left flowers on it like they did to Sleeping Beauty when they thought she was dead" Baby Bears' tears started rolling down.
"And LOOK honey, someone has eaten half of my porridge" growled Papa Bear, now he was angry, because he had been very excited to come back home to eat his wifes delicious porridge ( Mama Bears' specialty was making honey porridges)
"Uhh..Dear?" mama bear said in a hushed whisper, "Someones sleeping in Babys bed"
Surprised, Goldilocks noticed she wasn't the only one in the room now. Goldilocks was so frightened she didnt even have time to think of anything other than RUN!!
As she dashed off, she found her way back onto the path and kept on running until she reached her own home.
Mother was very angry because she was late home and she had started to get worried. Goldilocks learnt her lesson not to intrude on other peoples properties, or eat their food without permission and she had to write a letter explaining to cousin Dorothy how she had lost her shoes.
As for Baby Bear, he was very happy to be the owner of new red shoes, he now uses on his morning walks. And he takes extra care of them too.
The End.
hey, i got your comment on my fan fic so thought i should comment on yours. This story was so unique, bringing all these imagination and fantasy stories into one. A few spelling mistakes (herd) and sometimes it was simple and easy to read which i really liked. Loved how the bear got the red shoes and ends up being paddlington bear or big bear depending on what country you're from. Good job.
ReplyDeletehey appreciate the feedback (I am now looking for 'herd' ) :)
ReplyDeleteActually I didn't really think of paddington bear lol, but yes, the bear in my story can now be known as Paddington bear haha.
And thank you for commenting, once again.
great fanfic! just wondering, the second paragraph you tend to use 'two' instead of 'too'?? is it ment to be that way??
ReplyDeletep.s can you please, comment on my fanfic story! lol. click into group 2, its under 'Harri's fanfic' cheers.
ReplyDeletehey! Danni told me about your fanfic so i came to have a look. its really good! its so different. which is the awesome thing about it.
ReplyDeleteas Danni and Fonuku pointed out, there are a few spelling mistakes (one, two instead of one too, herd instead of heard etc) and a few grammatical errors (Goldilocks case with a ' after the d, and commas where full stops should be) but thats minor things.
as i said, written really well! =)
hey guys, shux thanks for the comments, its actually meant to be "one, two many..." lol,I was just trying to use numbers, for some reason it sounded better lol, like as in three bears, three porridges, three things etc.. But thanks for the feedback.
ReplyDeleteThanks for commenting on my fanfic.
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you mixed some fairy tales together into one, which was so fun to read.
Also, nice and well written fanfic!
Good job :)
Hey! I read this a couple of days ago but forgot to comment!! Anyways, you're fanfic IS really well written, and interesting!
ReplyDeleteThere were some 'minor' errors, but it has already been pointed out by the previous comments. Aparts from that, it was awesome!
Great Job!
hi it was really interesting fanfic! and well written!
ReplyDeletewell done~
Hey! thanks for commenting on my fanfic, it was very nice of you to do so. Sorry I am so late on commenting back, i was away from NZ and just got back! Anyway, I really emjoyed reading your fanfic, esp enjoyed how you used coloured letterings and wordarts, very attractive and clever!
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